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Car ownership has increased so rapidly over the past thirty years that may cities in the world are now 'one big traffic jam' How true do you think this statement is ? What measures can governments take discourage people from using their cars?

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Nowadays,
people
 prefer
traveling
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travelling
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 by
car
 rather than using any public mode of
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transportation
tranportation
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transportation
 which has caused daily traffic jams. Government should take steps to promote
mass
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a mass
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 transit system in order to reduce individual vehicles on the
road
. In
this
 essay, I will discuss these points in detail with some daily life examples. In the running days,
traveling
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travelling
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 by
car
 is considered
to
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apply
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a social status symbol as horses and elephants were used in
the
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apply
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ancient times.
Therefore
,
car
 ownership has increased so fast that it
take
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takes
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 months to receive
ordered
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an ordered
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 vehicle even after paying
full
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the full
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 amount in advance.
Moreover
, some youngsters buy them just for the purpose of showing off to their
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classmates
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class mates
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classmates
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 and friends. They even use credit cards in order to get
latest
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the latest
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 cars to
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fulfil
fullfil
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fulfil
 their desire.
Hence
,
this
 scenario ultimately
cause
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causes
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 congestion on roads despite
of
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well designed
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well-designed
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 wide roads.
In addition
,
some
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at some
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peek
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peak
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 hours like office and school timings
people
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experience
expreience
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experience
worst
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the worst
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 traffic jams and air pollution. To solve
this
 issue, authorities should take solid steps to discourage folks
getting
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from getting
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 too
much
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many
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 cars on the
road
. They should promote mass transit
system
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systems
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such
 as trams and
busses
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buses
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 to minimize
load
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the load
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 on streets.
For example
, a bus can normally carry up to 50 persons while taking no more than three
car
space
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spaces
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 on the
road
.
On the contrary
, 50
people
traveling
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travelling
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 on separate motors will cause a
road
 blockage. To conclude, the trend of
car
 ownership has increased a lot of pressure on the arteries of a city.
People
 are buying them to show their social and financial status. To overcome
this
 problem, governments should encourage mass
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transportation
tranportation
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transportation
system
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systems
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 with maximum efficiency and
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minimum
minumum
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minimum
 cost.
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