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Some people think that the government should invest more money in teaching science than other subjects in order for a country to develop and progress. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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In the modern world, technological advancements and resultant progress occur in almost all countries around the world every day. Continuously bombarded with
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 news, it’s easy to forget the fact that development of any kind doesn’t comprise solely
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. It’s
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 not proper to argue that
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 should have dominance over other subjects in receiving governmental funds.
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 of all, a stable society offering each citizen a livelihood is the premise of a country’s development and progress. Since not all people could manage to become a scientist or an engineer, vocations like lawyers, teachers, cooks or even cashiers are still needed. If schools emphasize only teaching
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, those who are not interested in or adept at it would be crippled by the education system and deprived of the right to live decently.
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, only scientific discoveries don’t make multi-billion industries. Liberal arts are
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 crucial for the industrialization of any epoch-making invention.
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, the invention of 5G technology itself requires scientists, but its generalization, especially for civilian uses, calls for the cooperation of people from all walks of life, including designers for the advertisements, sales agencies in charge of the transactions, and managers to keep the company running. These are all essential parts of converting technological breakthroughs into a well-developed industry, and none of these comes from the domain of
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. In conclusion, as interactions among countries turn increasingly deeper than before, it is not
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 and technology itself but how it is utilized and promoted globally that could determine a country’s competitive edge, and
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 could not be obtained without the joint efforts of all sectors from the society.
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  • economic growth
  • holistic development
  • technological advancements
  • critical thinking
  • cultural awareness
  • sustainable development
  • return on investment (ROI)
  • global competitiveness
  • job market
  • equitable education
  • funding allocation
  • curriculum balance
  • civic responsibilities
  • interdisciplinary approach
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