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The plans below show a harbour in 2000 and how it looks today. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

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The maps illustrate the evolution of a harbour in 2000 and how it looks now. It clearly can be seen that the harbour has been redeveloped with the addition of an extra
dock
, showers and toilets, cafes and shops, and a
hotel
. On the northern part of the harbour,
while
 the public beach remains the same,an extra
dock
 was added for passenger ferries.
Moreover
, the spots for fishing boats and marina for private yachts have been switched, and added with showers and toilets near the fishing boats
dock
. The southern part has seen significant changes, cafes and shops were introduced near the lifeboat
dock
.
Furthermore
, the access to the car park has been changed, making the car park accessible from the main road.
Additionaly
Correct your spelling
Additionally
, the disused castle was demolished and turned into a
hotel
.
As a result
, a new road was added to connect the other facilities to the
hotel
 and the public beach on the southern part has been changed into a private beach for the
hotel
.
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introduction conclusion present
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logical structure
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complete response
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coherence cohesion
You provided a clear and well-organized comparison between the two time periods of the harbour.
supported main points
You described relevant features and changes in detail, supporting your main points effectively.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • harbour (or harbor)
  • docks
  • shipping lanes
  • warehouses
  • recreational areas
  • infrastructure
  • additions
  • removals
  • facilities
  • environmental sustainability
  • economic impact
  • local community
  • capacity
  • technological advancements
  • industrial shipping
  • recreational use
  • surrounding infrastructure
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