Some peop/e think it is no longer necessary /'or children fo go fo school because ffiey can do all their learning on//ne. Others gei/ev’e learning in schools is essential. Discuss both views and give yot/r opinion.

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Technology makes virtual education possible for everyone, especially
children
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all over the world.
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affects the way
children
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study, at
school
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or at home. In my opinion, despite the versatility of the Internet,
school
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is still vital. Studying at home is said to be better for both
children
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and the community.
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, the
children
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are guaranteed to be safe without walking to
school
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alone or at night.
secondly
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, a lot of money will be saved because they do not have to buy many studying materials, they can use them online.
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, the government can spend the money to develop the economy
instead
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of building
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a campus
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campus
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campuses
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,
supporting
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and supporting
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children
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.
However
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, it is undeniable that
school
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is irreplaceable. The sentence “
school
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is the
second
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home” is still right nowadays.
school
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is the environment for the
children
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to develop themselves
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physical and mental health, social skills,
relationships
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and relationships
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.
For example
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, a child who stays at home all day is not as active,
brisk
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and brisk
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as the one who goes to
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.
Furthermore
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, online learners can not get enough sources from the Internet without the method of the teacher or the motivation from their peers. In conclusion, combining
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traditional and online classes is the best way for
children
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to develop all of the skills they need and
school
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will never be replaced.
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