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You recently booked a part-time course at a college. You now need to cancel your booking. Write a letter to the college administrator. In your letter Say which part-time course you booked Explain why you need to cancel your booking Ask about booking a different course

#course #college #administrator
Dear Sir or Madam, I hope
this
 finds you well. I am writing
this
 letter to ask you
cancel
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 my
last
 reservation and exchange it
with
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for
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different
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a different
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 course.
First
 of all, I am going to tell you a detail of my booking. I registered for
data-science
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the data-science
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 course which
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held
holds
helps
helds
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is helds
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on
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at
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 11-15 AM from 23-29 December. When I wanted to book for
class
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a class
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 I thought , I can give a week
offfrom
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off from
 my work.But unfortunately, I have to attend an important meeting
in
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at
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 my work , my manager invited a Korean
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businessman
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business man
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businessman
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at
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to
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 the same week and I am not in
the
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a
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 position that
change
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changes
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 the meeting date. So I have to change my class time
with
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to
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same
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the same
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 course that
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holds
helps
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is helds
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helds
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held
 on one week later . I hope you make a decision quickly and tell me
about
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apply
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your opinion. Faithfully, Neda
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Part-time course
  • Cancellation
  • Booking
  • Administrator
  • Financial situation
  • Work commitments
  • Health issues
  • Inconvenience
  • Transfer
  • Subject area
  • Schedule
  • Format
  • Cancellation policy
  • Refund process
  • Assistance
  • Understanding
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