You work at home and have a problem with a piece of equipment that you use for your job. Write a letter to the shop or company which supplied the equipment. In your letter, describe the problem with the equipment explain how this problem is affecting your work say what you want the shop or company to do

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Dear Sir, I bought a laptop from your store about 6 months ago and I am writing

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letter to you regarding the

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fading issue I am facing

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few days. On

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I was working on my desk and I

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some water on my laptop. Due to that, the

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. Yesterday, I was giving a

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to a client, and the

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I was unable to read

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anything on the

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is affecting my work as my manager thinks I was not prepared to give the presentation and because of that, he denied me a raise. I tried drying it with the help of a hair dryer but I was

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unsuccessful

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. I would really appreciate

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you can give me some advice on fixing it at home or I can drop

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at the shop for repair but I would need a spare monitor until I get mine back. Let me know if you have any other questions. Sincerely, Vimal Thakkar.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

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Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

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Task Achievement: 8.0

Complete response

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178 words

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