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An increase in production of consumer goods results in damaging the environment. What are the causes of this and give a possible solution

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Indubitably, there is a paradigm shift in the manufacturing of
goods
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 related to the common layman. Escalating manufacturing of these
goods
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 leads to atrocious effects on the environment across the globe. There are myriad reasons for
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 perennial predicament
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 as more
population
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, usage of pesticides and escalating industrialisation which I will elucidate in upcoming paragraphs. To embark upon,
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 and foremost reason for
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 issue is overpopulation. The
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 of
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 globe is escalating at an unprecedented scale which leads to
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 in demand for consumer
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 worldwide and industrialisation is
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 surging up to meet
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 hiking demand for products owing to the production of enormous industrialization wastage in the form of emission of detrimental gases in the atmosphere which evidently triggered to dismal air quality.
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, as per Pollution Control Board, Myriad Asian countries have had catastrophic air quality due to industrial wastage in the
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 decade.
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, there are various remedies which are helpful to overcome
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 menace.
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 ,all authorities must take an initiative to educate industrialists about the detrimental repercussions on the environment through advertisements and campaigns so that they could invent other alternatives to dump their unprocessed materials because the production of consumer
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 could not be put on hold due to
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 setback. One more initiative is that government could impose
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 control laws on society which helps in mitigating the
population
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 and production of consumer
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 as well. To sum up,
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 there are various causes of
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 universal phenomenon yet antidotes are
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 available which can be attained with the collective steps of the regime and industrialists as well.
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