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In the future, people may no longer be able to pay for things in shops using cash. All payments may have to be made by card or using mobile phones. Do you think this will happen one day? Why do you think some people might not be happy to give up using cash?

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There is no denying that after money was found by Lydians in ancient times, it was a part of our lives
year
 by
year
. Most
people
 have started to
use
 it everywhere,
such
 as buying something, paying their debts etc.
However
, technology is getting better every
day
, so communities deal with their payments without
cash
 in the world. I believe
this
 could happen.
Also
, thanks to technology, nowadays all payments are started to make by card or electronic devices like mobile
phones
, computers or tablets effortlessly.
To begin
 with,
although
cash
 is still used by humans, one
day
 it is replaced by
cards
 or
phones
. Because while countless cotton is grown up and cultivated by producers to make
cash
, some
people
use
 trees to produce it in the world.
Thus
, they damage
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nature without
recognizing
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itrecognizing
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.
For example
, when they cut
the
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trees unconsciously to make
cash
,
this
 situation is hazardous for the climate. Because plants are significant for fresh air.
In addition
, because of the
cash
, numerous diseases are spread easily from person to person.
For instance
, a man or woman who is feeling blue when he/she gives
people
cash
, he/she causes others to get sick. Because of these reasons,
people
 will start to
use
cards
 or
phones
 one
day
.
However
, even if all payments are paid without
cash
, some
people
 still might not be ecstatic to break up using
cash
. Unexperienced
people
 can be swindled when they
use
 their
cards
. They are afraid of
this
 situation.
Therefore
,
people
 try to pay their debts or shop with
cash
. In conclusion, thanks to improving technology,
cash
 leaves
from
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our lives
year
 by
year
.
Cash
 is not only dangerous for nature but
also
 spreads harmful
microorganism
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microorganisms
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.
Therefore
,
people
 will start to
use
cards
 or
phones
instead
 of
cash
 one
day
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • digital payments
  • convenient
  • efficiency
  • reduce crime
  • tangibility
  • privacy
  • limited access to technology
  • job losses
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