Some people are of the view that industries and multinational companies, and not the government, should pay for the cost of ways to clean up the pollution they have created. To what extent do you agree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Since the start of the industrial revolution in the 18th century, humanity has witnessed a remarkable rise in the world's economy. Goods, products and commodities were manufactured at an increased volume and pace. Now, fast forwarding to the present day, industries and multinational
companies
are responsible for
the
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consumer products all over the world;
however
, there is a much
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sinister
side to
this
as well. These
companies
are responsible for the vast amount of
pollution
that is
threatening the environment we live in. Some people believe that
such
companies
ought to be responsible for the
pollution
they have caused, and I too agree with
this
. Most of the manufacturing industries source raw materials from natural resources, be it wood, petroleum, minerals, coal etcetera, and
this
leads to not only the exploitation of natural
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resources
resorces
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resources
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but
also
pollution
in the form of water, air and land
pollution
. Let us take the example of the oil and petrochemical industry, the extraction of petroleum not only leads to the contamination of
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, but the refining process of petroleum releases millions of metric tonnes of carbon dioxide and sulphur dioxide into the atmosphere. Most
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companies
comapnies
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companies
rarely practice what they preach, and so is the case with the manufacturing industry, where their
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"green practices" when scrutinised, turn out to be not so green after all. It is only logical for these
companies
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to clean up the mess that they create. And
this
can be done in several ways, like levying heavier taxes on
such
corporations or
by
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directing them to take
an
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active participation in
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waste management and
pollution
control, which is a direct result of their production. Better and more advanced water and air filtration systems can help control the
pollution
of the manufacturing industry to a great extent.
Moreover
, recycling
of
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waste products and materials can lead to lower environmental impact. It is imperative to follow sustainable and eco-friendly practices for us to have a better environment
that is
not full of toxic water or poisonous air. And for
this
, we must urge those in power to stop giving a
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to major corporations. Industries and multinational
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companies
comapnies
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companies
must be held responsible for the
pollution
that they cause and they must be responsible for cleaning up the environment. The planet we live on is not just inhabited by humans, it is
also
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as much a right and claim to it as we do.
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The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

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  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

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  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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