Nowadays environmental problems are too big to be managed by individual persons or individual countries. In other words, it is an international problem. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Nowadays environmental
problems
are too big to be managed by individual persons or individual
countries
.
In other words
, it is an international problem. To what extent do you agree or disagree? At the present time, environmental
issues
have  changed
one
of
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the serious
problems
not only for
one
country but
also
for all
countries
and human beings. I completely agree
to
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this
view and think that environmental
problems
cannot be only
one
country’s
issues
and all nations need to solve
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of
problems
altogether.
First
of all, I believe that having a union among the
countries
to resolve
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environmental
problems
may be
much
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more effective way.
In other words
, only if
one
nation fight
to
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the
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environmental
problems
like air pollution, contamination, drought and soil erosion,
this
country’s
effort may be manky
,
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because
this kind
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of
issues
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only can be solved by
union
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the union
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of
countries
.
For example
,
Chinese
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the Chinese
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country’s
government prohibited to smoke, using
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cars and anything which are making
some
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dangerous
effect
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effects
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for
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our nature. But,
although
this
country’s
too much
efforts
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to resolve some
problems
, they are not able to solve all of them.
Therefore
,
people
and nations should try to stop the environmental troubles
as
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like as
one
body. 
Second
of all,
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are not
managed
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to resolve the
problems
which are badly
effecting
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to
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our ecosystem.
That is
to say, only if some
people
fight to reduce the environmental
problems
however
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others not, after  these
issues
may keep
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increases
itself
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pollution or other sorts of dangerous impact
for
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our environment.
For instance
, some
people
may
to
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be environmentally friendly and
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of
people
can be unfriendly and they may throw away their own garbage
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the land and
this
can create some risky environmental
issues
.
Thus
, we mankind should hold the balance of environmental
problems
. To conclude, I strongly believe that fighting
to
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the environmental
problems
under
the
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one
union can be
best
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solution for our mankind.
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  • climate change
  • rising sea levels
  • extreme weather events
  • biodiversity loss
  • ecosystems
  • Convention on Biological Diversity
  • significant improvements
  • sovereignty
  • environmental policies
  • international collaboration
  • environmental degradation
  • shared responsibility
  • technological advances
  • innovative solutions
  • international cooperation
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