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Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

#people #time #loss #species #plants #animals
In recent years disappearance of
plants
 and
animals
 has been one of the big environmental
issue
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. While some will believe that we should care about much more serious problems
such
 as global warming. I strongly believe that
loss
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the loss
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 of particular
species
 of
plants
 and
animals
 is important as
much
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apply
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as other environmental problems.
To begin
 with,
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a supporter
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supporter
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supporters
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 of
animals
 and
plants
 believe that these natural assets play a
rule
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role
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 to maintain the beauty of nature as well as
balance
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 the ecosystem. The loss of
species
 can break
food
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the food
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 chain in the environment.
In other words
, if some
species
 of
plants
 and
animals
 disappear, other
species
 will
loss
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 their feed.
However
, other people said that rest of the
plants
 and
animals
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animals'
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issue
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issues
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not
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,not
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serious
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a serious
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problem
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problems
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.
First
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,First
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 the lack of water could be the main concern, decreasing water
level
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levels
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 and dirty water on some continents.
Furthermore
, every year ice increasingly melting is
big
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a big
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 problem for polar bears. They have no place to leave.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • biodiversity
  • extinction
  • habitat loss
  • ecosystem
  • food chain
  • imbalance
  • interconnected
  • climate change
  • pollution
  • personal actions
  • policy changes
  • education
  • awareness
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