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Our personalities are predetermined as a result of our genes before we are born and there is nothing that can be done to alter our character trait to what extent do you agree

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Our personalities are predetermined
as a result
 of our
genes
 before we are born and people inherit them from their
parents
.We take not only appearance but
also
 our line of characters.I agree with
this
 theory in part. At ,
first
 each people is unique
although
 they have the same
genes
 as their
parents
, there are plenty of arguments influencing people's growth and education.
For example
 environment,schools ,
parents'
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parent's
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 education , and districts can affect in person's habits and temperaments.
Secondly
 that it is a rather debatable question because it is not learnt by the end how per cent
genes
 which
parents
 they take.Nowadays scientists and genetic engineers do more work to discover more and more. In Jack London's <<Before Adam>> book ,there are some interesting points about
genes
 and gene memory .The author explains how it is
transferring
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transferred
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 from generation to generation. To conclude we can say that we have some parts from our family and we will transfer them to the
next
 generation.
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