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The internet has a bigger impact on people’s lives because it is more popular than television. Do you age or disagree?

#internet #impact #people’s #lives #television #age
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 the
internet
 is becoming a golden standard
of
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 people around the world. I agree that social networking has a strong effect on everyone's life
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 since it is getting widespread and more convenient to use. It is known that the 21st century is a golden age of virtual reality and technologies.
The technology
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 is evolving day by day and the advantages of networking
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 increasing.
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, everyone uses
internet
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the internet
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 even children and elders. Since social
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media
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medias
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media
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has
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 been widespread, it impacts
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people's lives, Everyone has an account on social media and they check the news,
watch
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and watch
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different
difterent
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different
 videos on it every day.
That is
 why
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The internet
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internet
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 is being more popular and
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effective
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affective
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to
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 human beings. As I said before, there are
lot
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 of advantages of
internet
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the internet
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. One of the main benefits of social networking is its convenience. With just a click viewers of
internet
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the internet
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 can carry out various operations like sharing and watching videos, posts and doing shopping.
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, nowadays there are many bloggers who
posts
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 about news or even their personal lives. Subscribers are being in
know
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 of everything because they just followed many channels. To sum up, networking is
being
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influential due to its advantages
such
 as convenience and popularity.
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