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some people think that it is a good idea to socialise with work colleagues during evenings and weekends . other people think it is important to keep working life completely separate from social life . discuss both these views and give youe own opinion .

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Nowadays , some people prefer being in contact with their colleagues in their leisure
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 of trying to make new friends outside their workplace. In my opinion ,
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 is a good trend , and in the following paragraphs of
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 9 hours every day and approximately they spend an average of half an hour commuting so they may not have much
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 for communicating with others during the week
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 instance , art classes and gyms are open at 8 Am and close at 6 Pm and its the same as their
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 so they would not take part in these class .
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 , beauty salons where they can find many friends will not service after 4 pm .
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 , if they
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 in a company as a full-
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 employee , they may not have many options to make a lot of new friends and I think it is a good idea to socialise with their coworkers during the evening and weekends.
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, sometimes people
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 in a place where they do not have similar interests with their colleagues and
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 they have different cultures .
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 , I am working as a planner in a government company and I am living far from my colleagues and it is very hard for me that I can be in touch with them after
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 , we do not have the same idea about the quality of life
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 instance, some of them prefer saving their money for the future
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 of spending money on a brand's clothes or going to a popular and well-known restaurant and
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 rent an apartment in a better provines so honestly, I do not agree with them because the quality of life is really important for me . But with all the differences we have , I think we get along together and we try to respect our opinion
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 of going to restaurants or coffee after
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 , we make homemade food once a week and enjoy our
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. In conclusion , I think it is very important we have a good relationship with our coworkers and we provide a friendly and positive atmosphere. .
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