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Doing an enjoyable activity with a child is better for their overall skills development and creativity than reading. To what extent do you agree ?

#activity #child #skills #development #creativity
It goes without saying that
this
 is a tough question for me. As a matter of ,fact in two ,decades educational system and teaching methods were different from nowadays. In the past teacher utilized simple methods
such
 as reading and teacher-led lessons, for ,example educators did not use computers, projectors, television and those sorts of things which was the lessons were tedious for pupils and outright not so effective just currently term. Fortunately from time to ,time the learning skills become different without a doubt with advanced technology. The children would be able to do beneficial and practical activities which can improve and develop their overall skills and of course kid's creativity why
this
 technique success and valuable because the youngsters comprehend all materials and information uncomplicated way than reading some articles or story than understand them these process to involve more moment . It should be noted that an enjoyable and entertaining pastime captivates youngsters' attention
instead
 of reading some long story.
In addition
,
naturally
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 kids are curiosity particularly about iridescent items or compelling things , for ,instance the indoor activity " blind artist"
this
 game is played in pairs and engages a child 's imagination and the ability to describe things ,especially in outdoor activities are really useful and beneficial for them
such
 as badminton , hopscotch or tag these games can be necessary for their health. ,
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 they can admire nature and breathe fresh air In my opinion, Certainly doing an amusing activity with children can be more profitable for their skills development and inventiveness than reading
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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