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In some countries, secondary schools aim to provide a general education across a range of subjects. In others, children focus on a narrow range of subjects related to a particular career. Which do you think is appropriate in today’s world?

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There are 2 main types of education for
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secondary school in several countries. The
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 option is teaching children general subjects to gain various
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 of knowledge. In others, the students will be focusing more on
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subject
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 careers.
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 of subjects is superior to the other
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 and the main points will be expressed in the following paragraph. The
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 benefit is that all junior until high school kids will have a variety
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 old age is the part where everyone seeking for their interest and dreams.
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, the probability
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 students to achieve their
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, if we concentrate only
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 the subjects that are relevant to
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each job, it might shut down an opportunity for other students to learn
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, A class for engineering will study only science and math, so it will be extremely hard for some groups of people who didn't want to graduate
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 it might cause depression for them. A related advantage for the student is to understand the point of view of
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others. A different class will contain various styles of people which
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 us to receive various ideas. According to Japanese science research, a project group which
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ideas from members who have
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different
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, if the work
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 create with the same perspectives, the result will be a boring piece of art. Eventually, our world population will be less creative. In conclusion,
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 on
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 range of lesson will
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student
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 a chance to find their path and understandable
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others
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 thought.
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 will be able to
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 their career goal
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 the end.
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