Some people think that youngsters should get involved in unpaid work, while others oppose as it may affect their career. Discuss both the sides and give your opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include and relevant examples.

For the longest time in
history
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youngsters
have been used as a cheap source of labor. It is believed that a child can
work
as much as an adult
,
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while
being paid less.
Till
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this
day it is still common for some poverty-stricken countries to go around the law and involve
children
in hard
work
. I disagree that
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involvement of
youngsters
in many different aspects is acceptable
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because it is unacceptable to take advantage of a younger person who still hasn’t fully developed his self-conscious mind. One justification would be that people who think that
youngsters
should involve themselves in unpaid
work
don’t see the possibility of ruining the youngster's childhood. Most
of
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people who decide that their
children
should
work
from a young
age
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are parents who want their
children
to be successful. It is a popular misconception that
youngsters
who start working from an early
age
will be up to speed with the older
children
. It may be true, but
by
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doing that to a youngster from an early
age
will create a barrier between
the
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childhood and
the
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adolescence.
Also
, the child will not experience the importance of freedom and creativity,
while
starting to
work
from an early
age
. Personally, I
also
believe that
youngsters
who do not get paid for their
work
will lose a sense of motivation to do something for a reward. It will make them unmotivated to try harder in school
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because the grade wouldn’t be worth anything to them. A
further
reason not to involve
youngsters
in unpaid
work
would be that they won’t be able to do tasks given to them properly
due to
the
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lack of experience. Supporters of
this
type of youngster involvement in unpaid
work
believe that working should be beneficial to the growing child in order to deter them from becoming lazy and unproductive members part of the community.
However
, there is very little evidence to suggest that
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from
young
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age
is beneficial for the future. In conclusion, involving
youngsters
in unpaid
work
is unethical and, in my opinion, ineffective, both for
work
and career reasons. That said, it would be useful to talk with the
children
and get to know what they would want to do for a job and what kind of
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payment would suit them the best. I strongly believe that
involvement
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of
youngsters
in unpaid
work
should be based on communication between the people and their
children
.
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