Prison is the common way in most countries to solve the problem of crime. However, a more effective solution is to provide people a better education. Agree or disagree.

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one of the main problems in any

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, people think that better education should replace prison to treat a criminal. I partly agree with

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the following essay. On the one hand, I admit that law offenders should be put in jail due to the terrible wrongdoings they have done for some

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, punishing criminals has contributed to

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the pain of the victims since they have been negatively affected while they may not do anything wrong.

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mistrust or a lack of sympathy among residents if the wrongdoings are not punished properly. For

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, Le Van Luyen - a terrible robber and killer in Vietnam was believed to be kept in prison forever as he killed

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all people in the family for gold.

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should be used

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share of benefits for society.

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of all, by exposing to education through books or lessons, criminals

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have a chance for the sake of approaching to moral things which can have an optimistic influence on them. Indeed,

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criminals are allowed to take that opportunity to think and live better. Afterwards, the community may have more good people than bad ones due to

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ethical method of punishment. In conclusion, for many years,

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has been seen as

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effective

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way in order to address the problem of crime, I

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that better education should be taken into consideration since it may have positive effects on society.

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Topic Vocabulary:

tackles root causes
preventative approach
critical thinking
decision-making skills
recidivism rates
equipping
socio-economic benefits
underlying factors
poverty
ignorance
lack of opportunities
rehabilitation
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Prison is the common way in most countries to solve the problem of crime. However, a more effective solution is to provide people a better education. Agree or disagree.

Fully explain your ideas

The best way to reduce poverty in developing countries is by giving up to six years of free education, so that they can at least read, write and use number. To what extent do you agree or disagree

Lots of people are throwing away food, what are the reasons for this and how can food wastage is reduced?

Nowadays, many people have to work longer hours, and they feel more stressed out than before. What are the reasons? What can employers do to make their life easier?

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It is more important for a building to serve its purpose to look beautiful. Architects don’t need to worry about whether it is a real work of art. Do you agree or disagree?