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Writing Samples
Band 7

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. You have lost your student identification card. This has created some problems for you. Write a letter to the director of student services. In your letter advise them of your situation explain how this is affecting you request a new card

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Dear Mr Sharma, I am one of the students pursuing an economics diploma at your college. I am writing
this
 letter to inform you that my Student ID card has been misplaced and it has affected many tasks in my daily routine. I am new to
this
 city and I usually buy all my groceries from the college canteen only.
However
, now they are not allowing me to buy groceries without showing the card.
Moreover
, I am not able to access the college library and other major areas
due to
 the loss of identification proof. It is really affecting my studies
as well as
 my survival in a new place. I hope you understand my situation.
Therefore
, I request you issue a new card at the earliest possible. In case you need any other details regarding my personal information, I am happy to share
the
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. Looking forward to hearing from you soon. Yours faithfully, Lavina
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task response
Your letter effectively addresses the task by clearly explaining the situation and requesting a new card. Ensure all relevant information has been included.
coherence cohesion
The logical structure of your letter is good, but the greeting and closing could be more formal. Consider using 'Dear Mr. Sharma' as the salutation and 'Yours sincerely' as the closing.
lexical resource
Your use of vocabulary and expressions is clear and appropriate. Consider using a wider range of vocabulary to enhance the overall quality of your writing.
grammatical range
Your grammatical range is quite good, but watch out for small errors such as 'they are not allowing me'—consider 'I am not being allowed.' Also, consider using more complex sentence structures to showcase your full grammatical range.
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