Some people believe that violence on television and in computer games has a damaging effect on society. Others deny that these have any significant influence on people's behaviour. What is your opinion?

Nowadays,
people
are exposed to films,
games
, and news that involve the contents of
violence
. Some
people
claim that
people
are affected adversely by these sources that are about
violence
.
On the other hand
, some of them believe that there is not any important impact on
people
's attitudes. In my opinion, it is
the
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fact that
people
see regularly
committing
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violence
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that is
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is
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as
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harmful
for
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to
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people
's lives.
To begin
with, due to the fact that
people
are exposed to encounter severity on
people
, animals, and other things frequently; they think that committing
violence
is the normal situation. They may normalize
violence
gradually. It is evident that society may be influenced by
violence
on
the
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technological devices.
For example
,
violence
on
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against
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women
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women's
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news
have
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become widespread on television and
this
situation is followed by increasing
violence
that commits
on
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against
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women. Because
people
see on the television and take power from it. After
that
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,that
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they commit
this
crime.
In addition
, many computer
games
comprise damage attitudes,
such
as death,
violence
and fighting. In modern society, children spend their
of
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time on computers and video
games
.
Therefore
, they try to behave
what
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they see in the
games
.
Also
, they do not consider
sense
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the sense
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of emotion when they kill figures of
people
in the game.
This
condition eliminates children's
feels
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feelings
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so they cannot hesitate to be vulnerable
for
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to
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somebody in the real life. In conclusion, humans are able to be affected by many things. They tend to act and normalize what they encounter.
Therefore
, these programs that involve
the
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content
of
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violence
should be banned
for
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from
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livable
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a livable
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world.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • desensitize
  • aggressive behavior
  • emotional and psychological development
  • impair
  • empathy
  • contributing factor
  • distinction
  • fiction and reality
  • mature audiences
  • reflective
  • prevalence
  • societal issues
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