Some people believe that violence on television and in computer games has a damaging effect on society. Others deny that these have any significant influence on people's behaviour. What is your opinion?
Nowadays,
people
are exposed to films, games
, and news that involve the contents of violence
. Some people
claim that people
are affected adversely by these sources that are about violence
. On the other hand
, some of them believe that there is not any important impact on people
's attitudes. In my opinion, it is the
fact that Correct article usage
a
people
see regularly committing
Wrong verb form
commit
violence
Correct pronoun usage
that is
is
harmful Correct your spelling
as
for
Change the preposition
to
people
's lives.
To begin
with, due to the fact that people
are exposed to encounter severity on people
, animals, and other things frequently; they think that committing violence
is the normal situation. They may normalize violence
gradually. It is evident that society may be influenced by violence
on the
technological devices. Correct article usage
apply
For example
, violence
on
Change preposition
against
women
news Change noun form
women's
have
become widespread on television and Change the verb form
has
this
situation is followed by increasing violence
that commits on
women. Because Change preposition
against
people
see on the television and take power from it. After that
they commit Add a comma
,that
this
crime.
In addition
, many computer games
comprise damage attitudes, such
as death, violence
and fighting. In modern society, children spend their of
time on computers and video Change preposition
apply
games
. Therefore
, they try to behave what
they see in the Change preposition
in what
games
. Also
, they do not consider sense
of emotion when they kill figures of Add an article
the sense
a sense
people
in the game. This
condition eliminates children's feels
so they cannot hesitate to be vulnerable Replace the word
feelings
for
somebody in the real life.
In conclusion, humans are able to be affected by many things. They tend to act and normalize what they encounter. Change preposition
to
Therefore
, these programs that involve the
content Correct article usage
apply
of
Change preposition
apply
violence
should be banned for
Change preposition
from
livable
world.Add an article
a livable
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