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Today, more and more people use robots to do tasks at home and at work. Do you think it is a positive or negative development? Why?

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Nowadays,
people
 are having a hard time reaching
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 using
robots
 to do is a positive or negative trend at home and at work.From my way of thinking,using
robots
 is
an
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 useful development. There is no doubt that using
robots
have
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 caused more merits than problems.For one thing,it helps to increase countries.As a matter of fact,these days more and more
people
 use
robots
 for increasing their
works
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 efficiency.Some
people
 believe that
this
 is very beneficial for
country
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 and
it's
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its
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every
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citizens
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.Undeniably,
this
 is using more beneficial than
people
's work.
This
 is a
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glaring
laring
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large
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way
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 troops feel
this
,nowadays 60%countries
using
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robots
.
Besides
 that,it helps us save
our
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time because through it we
for
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to do everything easier. To be sure, using
robots
 to do
at
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 work and at home is beneficial sides.
This
reasonable
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 to the
extend
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 that,many
people
 might don't
working
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by
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 these.A prime example of how
this
 scheme works is in recent years many
people
 unemployed.From my point of view,we might
using
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use
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robots
 moderately.Wham more
people
unemployed
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are unemployed
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. In
final
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 analysis, despite the fact that using
robots
 is a popular new trend,it helps
people
 when it comes to communication,time management and mental health.For
this
 reason,I am convinced that using
robots
 is a positive development in general.
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