You recently celebrated a special occasion in your personal life and received a card and a present from your colleagues at work. Write a letter to your colleagues. In your letter: remind your colleagues what the special occasion you were celebrating was thank them for the card and gift explain why you like the gift and how you will use it

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Dear Mr Yang, I am writing to express my thankfulness for your gift. I acquired an outstanding achievement reward in our company because I successfully promoted our company's merchandise in my home country. Due to

this

reason, more people have recognized our product so as to boost our oversea market shares. I sincerely appreciate your congratulatory letter and present, which means a significant expression for me. Since you are my mentor, your encouragement is my motivation to keep forward.

Additionally

this

luxury pen is an extraordinary symbol to bring me to another level of my career. I believe in the magical meaning of

this

pen because I know it can assist me in presenting my social status by using

this

expensive pen.

Furthermore

, I will utilize it to sign more contracts in order to bring more profits4 for our team. I would like to elaborate on my appreciation again at the end of

this

letter and hope you have a wonderful career journey as well. Yours sincerely, Claire Chen

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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
0Grammar mistakes
 

8 paragraphs

169 words

8.00

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 9.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 6.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

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