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you have just read an article in a national newspaper which claims that town centers in your country all look very similar to each other. you don't fully agree with this opinion. say which points in the article you agree with explain ways in which your town center is different from most other town centers offer to give guided tour of your twon to the writer of the article

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Dear Sir, I am writing in regard to the recent article that you published on Daily News. It is about your view on how
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 in the country all look very similar to each other. I agree with the part where you mentioned all the
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 contain a city hall, a police station, a church and some restaurants. I have been to many other towns and they do look similar more or less.
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, Jamestown, the
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 I was born and raised, is different from other
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. The part where it stands out the most is its immigrant culture.
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 is a
town
that is
 near the port that used to be a place for
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 over the world to land. There are different temples in the
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.
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, a Hindu temple and a Chinese temple. There are African grocery stores, Asian grocery stores and Italian grocery stores. I really enjoy the richness of the culture here. I would like to offer a guided tour of Jamestown when you visit
next
 time. I look forward to it.
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