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SOME PEOPLE THINK THAT IT IS BETTER TO ADUCATE BOYS AND GIRLS IN SEPARATE SCHOOLS. OTHERS, HOWEVER, BELIEVE THAT BOYS AND GIRLS BENEFIT MORE FROM ATTENDING MIXED SCHOOLS. DISCUSS BOTH THE VIEWS AND GIVE YOUR OPINION.

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Education plays a vital and prominent role in every individual’s life. In
this
 modern world, every person should take
education
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an education
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. Some are believed that it is good to educate
boys
 and
girls
 in
separate
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a separate
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school
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schools
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,
however
, others
also
 think that
to educate
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educating
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boys
 and
girls
 in
same
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the same
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school
 is more advantageous. In
this
essay
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,essay
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 I will discuss both
the
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apply
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views and give my opinion in conclusion. On the one hand, some are assumed that it should be better to educate
girls
 and
boys
 separately according to some short-sighted people because they have full freedom to speak and
also
 do not have to bother about
surroundings
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their surroundings
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.
In addition
, sometimes it would be beneficial.
For example
, In Saudi
Arabia
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,Arabia
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 they educate
boys
 and
girls
 in
different
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a different
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school
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schools
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.
As a result
, Saudi Arabia has the lowest rape and sexual assault rates in the world.
On the other hand
, others are believed that it should be better to educate
boys
 and
girls
 in
mixed
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a mixed
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school
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schools
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. Sometimes it would be advantageous because if they were educated in mixed schools
then
 they have become open-minded and
also
, the confidence level is build-up.
Furthermore
, they do not feel any kind of hesitation in future to talk with anyone and they get
chance
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a chance
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 to develop mutual understanding between them. Agglomerating all the points elaborated I would like to conclude that co-education is better for both,
boys
 and
girls
 so, they do not feel any kind of shy-ness in future and
also
helpful
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help
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 to build up their confidence level.
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