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The following charts contain information about the web browsers that were used to access Wikimedia in 2011 and 2012. Describe the main features and make a comparison .

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Both pie charts have been divided into 7 shares for web machines that are able to reach
Wikimedia
 from 2011 and 1 year later. In a beginning, the
first
 dominant finding is describing the proportion of accessibility to space of the world space network as becoming more balanced among 7 players in 2011 and 2012,
however
, one slice of pies which are belonging to unknown platforms that not described in
this
 figure. Internet Explorer as a giant web surfer has only 34.5
percent
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 of the whole accessibility of
Wikimedia
 and it dropped to 20
percent
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 in 2012 these numbers have been distributed unfairly in other automation and, Chrome has succeeded to gain 10
percent
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 of these areas for itself, while, other 6 players are playing more effectively to handle for using of
Wikimedia
, it has not found out any growth among Android, opera,
consequently
, the Safari has stabilized during one year. In conclusion, it is well understood the power of using
Wikimedia
 is becoming divergent and
this
 gap has widened in comparison to
past
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