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Research indicates that the characteristics we are born with have much more influence on our personality and development than any experiences we may have in our life.

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this
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 contemporary era, the research indicates that the personality and the development of a
person
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 come from the
characteristics
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individual
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an individual
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 is born with rather than
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experience
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the experience
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 he or she has in their
life
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. I believe that most
people
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’s development of their personality is influenced by their
life
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 experiences than the
characteristics
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person
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 is born with.
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 and foremost, most individuals learned a new skill from their
experience
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 of working and travelling. To explain, the
people
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 when they are working they learn
skills
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 as communication and teamwork.
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, by travelling
people
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learn
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 meet new cultures,
people
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 and languages and
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 explore new places where they can learn new things.
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, the article by the Times of India relived that most
people
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 build their personalities through the
experience
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 that they have in their
life
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 by travelling and working.
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, individuals become successful through the
skills
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 he or she had. To explain, a
person
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 can achieve his or her goal with hard work and
skills
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.
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, most
people
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 become successful and develop their different personalities through the
skills
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 and hard work that they have in
life
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.
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, the
characteristics
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person
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 has by
experience
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 help them in any field of their
life
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. While
,
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apply
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 the
characteristics
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person
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 is born with only help them in one field. In conclusion, I think that the personal development of personality is influenced by the experiences they have in their
life
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such
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 as travelling and working where they learn
skills
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 and new things
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 of the
characteristics
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person
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 is born with.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • nature vs. nurture debate
  • genetic inheritance
  • personality traits
  • behavior patterns
  • heritability
  • twins studies
  • malleable characteristics
  • upbringing
  • environmental influences
  • critical periods
  • language acquisition
  • worldview
  • innate traits
  • personal experiences
  • psychological development
  • epigenetics
  • adaptive behaviors
  • cultural imprinting
  • temperament
  • social conditioning
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