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Parents should encourage their children to spend less time on study and more time on doing physical activities. Do you agree or disagree?

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In recent years, parents would let their kids take less
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 studying than helping them take physical actions. And an increasing number of fathers and mothers are willing to advertise and do so. According to
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 reality, I would disagree with
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 point and verify it with related ideas as below. On the one hand, the schools encourage
students
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 to enrich their exercises and promote their body's strength can benefit young
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.
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, those movements may motivate their inspiration positively.
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 I think the approach is practical, I would definitely disagree that children should spend more
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 on that. As common sense, pupils' study is hard to achieve each term, and it is
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 impossible to extract the original limited
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 for more physical exercises.
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,
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 have to face the challenges of mid-term and final-term exams,
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 it would not be possible to condense their valuable age to take more
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 rather than more
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 studying.
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, practising
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 could not take the place of the use of learning knowledge.
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, common subjects focus on physics, chemistry, mathematics, and others, but physical life just relates to actual practice
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 of abstract conceptual theories and real paper exams.
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, young
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 cannot pass the exams well and gain a certificate of satisfactory graduation. In the future,
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, they are not going to obtain admission to university smoothly. In conclusion, I firmly believe that children ought to take more pace on studying rather than doing physical
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. As a supplementary method, pupils are capable of doing suitable physical
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 to make them stronger and healthier.
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, these kinds of pupils can fit the purpose of the nation's development eventually.
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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