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Some people think that the government should increase tax on unhealthy food to encourage people to start eating healthily. Do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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people
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tax
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 that
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 should start
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 healthy
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. In my opinion,
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do not should
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 increase taxes, because I think that unhealthy
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 must not have big value. I will give two arguments
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 "fast
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 dinner or something else faster and only
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 type of
food
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 can help with it.
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 should not think about
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 problem and must
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increase
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increase
 taxes
for
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 other unhealthy things, like
sigarrets
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garrets
 or
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alcohols
alhocols
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alcohol
, which are unhealthier than unhealthy
food
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.
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, from analyses, Switzerland
also
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 rose
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tax
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 rate for
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singlets
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what
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 country has
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countries
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 number of smokers.
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, unhealthy
food
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 is very delicious and when
people
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 eat
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 kind of
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, they have endorphins in their
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stimuli
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stimulant
 system, which is
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depression. Most
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people
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 go to meetings in restaurants, but only
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goes
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 to rich restaurants because not all of them can pay for it and they go to fast
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 restaurants. For, example if the
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 rises
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tax
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taxes
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 of
people
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 cannot have
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endorphins
endorphine
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endorphins
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 friends in places that they want to be. In conclusion, if
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 rises
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tax
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for
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 unhealthy
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, it gives to
people
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 only bad feelings. It is because of
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thing
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 that should and because
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they can
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 from
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 what they actually want.

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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • unhealthy food
  • junk food
  • calorie-dense
  • taxing
  • incentivize
  • manufacturers
  • prohibitively expensive
  • disproportionately
  • low-income households
  • healthcare costs
  • obesity
  • diet-related diseases
  • punitive measures
  • lifestyle choices
  • government intervention
  • food industry
  • economic impact
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