Some people think that the government should increase tax on unhealthy food to encourage people to start eating healthily. Do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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that
government
should
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raise
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tax
on fast
food
with
reason
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that
people
should start
eat
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healthy
food
. In my opinion,
government
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increase taxes, because I think that unhealthy
food
must not have big value. I will give two arguments
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people
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the people
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"fast
food
",
is
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having
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dinner or something else faster and only
this
type of
food
can help with it.
Government
should not think about
this
problem and must
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increase
increse
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increase
taxes
for
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other unhealthy things, like
sigarrets
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garrets
or
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alcohols
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alcohol
, which are unhealthier than unhealthy
food
.
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, from analyses, Switzerland
also
rose
tax
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rate for
siggarets
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singlets
ziggurats
, after
what
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this
country has
a
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countries
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the countries
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with
lowest
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number of smokers.
Secondly
, unhealthy
food
is very delicious and when
people
eat
this
kind of
food
, they have endorphins in their
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stimuli
stimulus
stimul
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stimulant
system, which is
also
good for them to not take
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depression. Most
of
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people
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go to meetings in restaurants, but only
such
of them
goes
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to rich restaurants because not all of them can pay for it and they go to fast
food
restaurants. For, example if the
government
rises
tax
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taxes
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,
a lots
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of
people
cannot have
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endorphins
endorphine
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endorphins
and cannot
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friends in places that they want to be. In conclusion, if
government
rises
tax
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taxes
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for
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unhealthy
food
, it gives to
people
only bad feelings. It is because of
increasing
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not
such
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thing
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that should and because
of
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they can
be take
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from
people
what they actually want.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • unhealthy food
  • junk food
  • calorie-dense
  • taxing
  • incentivize
  • manufacturers
  • prohibitively expensive
  • disproportionately
  • low-income households
  • healthcare costs
  • obesity
  • diet-related diseases
  • punitive measures
  • lifestyle choices
  • government intervention
  • food industry
  • economic impact
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