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Cheaper food is now available because of greater use of fertilizers and improved machinery. This improved production, however, can be harmful to individuals and the community. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this view? Discuss, including examples from your own knowledge and experience.

#food #fertilizers #machinery #production #individuals #community
All
parents
 want the best
opportunities
 for their
children
. There are some people who think that schools should teach
children
skills
 but others think having a range of subjects is better for a
children
's
future
. Discuss both sides and give your opinion . It is considered by some
parents
 that
children
 have to get
skills
 in school, while others think that education should be concentrated on subjects. In my opinion, teaching some additional
skills
 will help students in the
future
.
This
 essay will discuss both viewpoints. On the one hand, there is an option that school can give to
children
 not only
academic
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 base
,
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 but
also
 help to train some additional
skills
,
such
 as cooking, oratory, etc., which could help them in the
future
.
In other words
, individuals who have life
skills
 will be easier to adapt
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 adult life, and received knowledge,
such
 as oratory, could give strong points to the candidate
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an
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university
 interview. It is difficult to argue against
this
 view as long as
such
 knowledge prepares teenagers for the best
opportunities
 and it broadens their
mind
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minds
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.
For instance
, the priority of universities in England is to get the best students, and competition is very high, because they want to get not only well-educated for the academic side, but
also
 well-prepared with
skills
,
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 because universities
also
 want to know which bonuses candidates can bring to
university
 life.
However
, many
parents
 believe that
the
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concentration on a subject is better for
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future
,
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 because academic knowledge will help to get the best work
opportunities
. Indeed, some professions require a strong academic base,
such
 as medicine, and companies require job seekers to have a degree to be a part of their organization.
This
 may be true of some particular work, and some professions require people to study a subject deeply, but there are many cases when candidates move forward into
the
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career steps without specialized training. To illustrate, many businessmen,
such
 as Steve Jobs, did not get a
University
 degree
,
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 but could
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his
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 own company by possessing the necessary
skills
 for a successful businessman. To conclude,
although
 it is still believed by many
parents
 that schools should train
children
 in some
skills
,
other
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others
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 advocate the concentration on
a subjects
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a subject
subjects
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 will help students in the
future
. In my opinion,
school
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schools
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 have to study
skills
, because getting
of
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additional
skills
 will help young people get more
opportunities
in
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University
.
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