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SOME PEOPLE THINK THAT IT IS BETTER TO EDUCATE BOYS AND GIRLS IN SEPARATE SCHOOLS. OTHERS, HOWEVER, BELIEVE THAT BOYS AND GIRLS BENEFIT MORE FROM ATTENDING MIX SCHOOLS. DISCUSS BOTH THESE VIEWS AND GIVE YOUR OPINION.

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Owing to fascinating development in the field of education, nowadays students can easily learn anything from anywhere.
However
, in
this
 modern era,
boys
 and
girls
 must have to attend a mixed academy rather than a separate institute, because boarding
schools
 are bad for both these genders in
terms
 of communication, learning and sharing the feedback about developing world. In
this
 contemporary era, students are an integral part of every nation.
Also
, technology is developed and updated, so both
this
 gender learns so many things from the use of different application and software. If
boys
 and
girls
 are studying studies in a mixed institute
then
 it will be beneficial for both these genders in
terms
 of personal growth and better conversation to improve their point of view to see the world.
Also
, private
schools
 are better as compared to
the
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separate institutions, because, in
boys
’
schools
,
boys
 fight for their belongings even in some cases they do not learn properly as compared to mixed universities.
On the other hand
, mixed
schools
 have drawbacks
also
.
Firstly
, in
terms
 of homework,
this
 kind of school punished
girls
 as well as
boys
.
Secondly
, some rules are very strict in
terms
 of assignments and submission deadlines.
Thirdly
, some teachers support the girl factor in
this
 academy, while in boarding
schools
 teachers mutually support and understand the same for the
boys
. In a nutshell, I personally believe that education is a crucial part of each and every student’s life.
However
, it is not important where
boys
 or
girls
 want to study, but the important is they have to study and gain knowledge for personal and financial growth.
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