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People think that a hundred years ago, the human race was steadily improving in every area of life. Nowadays, there is no certainty of this case. In which areas do you think we have made important progress nowadays? In which areas do think we still need to make progress?

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The pie charts compare six different domestic utilities in terms of electricity consumption and
amount
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 of
greenhouse
gas
 emissions in Australia. It is clear that heating systems of rooms and water use the highest percentage of energy and emit the largest quantity of global warming gases.
However
, cooling needs the lowest
amount
 of power and produces the lowest
greenhouse
 gases. An average Australian
house
 needs about 72% of its energy supply to be directed for heating
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42% for heating the
house
 and 30% for water heating.
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 Heating produces about half of
greenhouse
gas
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32% from heating water and 15% from
house
 heating.
Refrigerators
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Refrigerators'
Refrigerator's
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 electricity usage is 7%, while other appliances use collectively 15% of the total supply to the
house
 which is double the
amount
need
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 for refrigeration.
Consequently
, other appliances produce
double
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amount
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 of
greenhouse
gas
 as refrigerators by 28%. Lights require 4% of energy and
shares
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by
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8% of
the
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greenhouse
gas
 production. At the bottom of power usage and
greenhouse
gas
 emissions comes cooling which needs 2% of
house's
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the house's
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 electricity supply and produces 3% of
greenhouse
gas
.
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