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A recent newspaper article reported that a 14 years old boy who seriously destroyed his school got the punishment to clean Street instead of being sent to prison. Do you think this is right or do you think that such criminal should be sent to prison.

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The 14 years old
boy
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 as 14 years old is considered to be
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minor,there is a lot of cause to think about either parents or the school administration where the
boy
 attended.It means that anywhere someone does huge mistakes in the way of a
boy
's education.In my ,opinion teenagers are under responsibility
firstly
 their parents or their teachers.
Firstly
 In my ,opinion it is better to do something good for society than to be taken to prison ,
besides
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this
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 educated and do not go in
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criminal
ways
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.
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 it is more
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beneficial
benefical
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beneficial
 for society or municipalities
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ro
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 force the
boy
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streets
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 than
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spend money to keep in prison,
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 can damage the future of young people. To conclude , I am more inclined to think that it is better to clean streets or give benefits to
city
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 or country than deform the boys' future.
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