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You have just spent a weekend staying at the Lilo Hotel in Adelaide. When you get home you find that you have left a bag at the hotel.

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Dear Sir, I am writing
this
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 letter in regards to enquire about the leftover item during my stay. I was there in the accommodation
last
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 weekend and way back home I realised I left my
bag
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 in your hotel
room
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. I enjoyed the
room
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 in the Adelaide branch for 3 days and 2 nights from 27 Nov. During
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 time, I had a comfortable space and tidy
room
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. I
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 took a glimpse of the early morning sunrise from the balcony. After vacating the hotel and on the way to my home, I remember that I left my handbag in the
room
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's cupboard. The handbag is brown in
color
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 and the brand is Gucci. You can
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 see the
bag
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 has a gold
color
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 chain with red and green ribbons. Would be great if you can collect and keep my
bag
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 with you so I can come over to collect it in the upcoming week.
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, note my
bag
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 has my passport and highly appreciate it if you can give me a call once you see
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 letter. Yours Faithfully, Emma
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