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The increase in the production of consumer goods results in damage to the natural environment. What are the causes of this? What can be done to solve this problem?

#production #consumer #goods #results #damage #environment
The boom of
manufacturing
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 industry provides consumers with abundant products and better living conditions, but it
also
 causes damage to the natural
environment
. In
this
essay
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 I will outline several reasons and put forward some measures to
this
 issue. The production of consumer
goods
 means large quantities of raw materials and fuels are consumed. To acquire these materials and fuels, people explore natural resources
such
 as oil, metal and
woods
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wood
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 throughout the world, leading to the destruction of the ecological
environment
. In the process of production, wastes and emissions are released from factories into nature.
For example
, in some textile
factories
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waste water
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wastewater
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 that contains toxic chemicals is discharged into the river.
Moreover
, since
goods
 are constantly manufactured and updated, consumers keep buying new products and throwing away the old ones.
Consequently
, a lot of rubbish is generated. The rubbish is hard to dispose of, and if burned or landfilled, it pollutes the air, water and soil. It is particularly important to note that the packaging of many
goods
 uses plenty of
plastic
.
Plastic
 is a major source of pollution to the
environment
 and because of its stable nature,
not
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 easy to decompose, the pollution of
plastic
 can
last
 hundreds of years. Actions should be taken to reduce the impact on the
environment
 resulting from the production of consumer
goods
. Recyclable materials and renewable energy should be developed and promoted in the manufacturing industry.
For instance
, solar and wind energy are replacing fossil fuels to provide energy supply in some factories.
Also
, with the popularization of biodegradable products, the amount of
plastic
 used
also
 declines.
In addition
 to these measures, I believe people should be encouraged to adopt low-carbon and eco-friendly lifestyles. If we could produce less and consume less, our planet would be effectively protected.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • production
  • consumer goods
  • natural environment
  • damage
  • causes
  • overconsumption
  • demand
  • environmental regulations
  • enforcement
  • natural resources
  • industrial pollution
  • waste
  • inadequate
  • waste management practices
  • public awareness
  • education
  • sustainable alternatives
  • stricter environmental laws
  • recycling
  • responsible consumption
  • clean technologies
  • renewable energy
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