Some people think the best way to reduce crime is to give longer prison sentences. Others, however, think there are better alternative ways to reduce crime. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
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government
of a nation sentencing Correct article usage
the government
longer
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a longer
time
in Use synonyms
prison
can decline its Use synonyms
country
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country's
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rate
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method
act as a deterrent and warning which can fear Use synonyms
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people
attempting to commit an offence . Yet , Use synonyms
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idea is not really rational for the following reasons :
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crime
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is that
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criminals
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method
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out which are more effective rather than increasing longer Change the verb form
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in Use synonyms
prison
. The best Use synonyms
method
to punish Use synonyms
criminal
is to educate them and Fix the agreement mistake
criminals
furthermore
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children
about laws and policies as well as the heavy impact Change to a singular noun
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will bring out the result that the Linking Words
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rate
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spread
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their surroundings Correct your spelling
spread
people
about the responsibility with laws . As for Use synonyms
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crime
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crimes
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recommit
re -commit
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Furthermore
Futhermore
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other methods
which are Fix the agreement mistake
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prove
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proven
is
improving social welfare policies . Mainly focusing Correct your spelling
in
in
ameliorating poor Change preposition
on
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people
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opportunities for stable jobs . An example is that in some Replace the word
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crime
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rate
tend to be lower than in Fix the agreement mistake
rates
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apply
under -developed
countries
To sum up , I think that imprisonment should be replaced by Correct your spelling
underdeveloped
others
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other methods
method
that can bring out better results . Use synonyms
Moreover
, every nation has to be responsible for taking care Linking Words
for
their Change preposition
of
people
to reduce the criminal Use synonyms
rate
caused by Use synonyms
poor
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a poor
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