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Now a days, many people have to work longer time, and they feel more stressful than before what are reasons ? what can employers do to make their life easier.

#people #work #time #employers #life
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In today's present era, everyone is chasing name,fame and money. They want to fulfil their goal by doing
work
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 for a longer time, but it increases
stress
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.
Stress
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 is a big problem, normal
stress
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 will be good but excessive
stress
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 invites many problems.
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 essay shall give reasons for causing
stress
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 in the workplace and
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 suggest some steps that employers can take to reduce it.
To begin
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 with, An employee can have lots of
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 to achieve unrealistic targets and complete them on
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 deadline. sometimes they can
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 for a long time and
work
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 hard to achieve it.
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,
stress
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 can be caused by
lack
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 of opportunity,
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 of job security,
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 of comfortable atmosphere,
lack
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 of smooth relationship with boss and colleagues and level of pay. on the other side, nowadays people want to live luxurious lifestyles and fulfil their family's demands at the cost of their health. There are many steps to follow as an employer to reduce workplace
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.
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, employers should diagnose reasons for
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 by checking their performance level and talking with them. They should give live entitlement. They should not emphasise unrealistic targets and review their
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 on a monthly basis and give them an appreciation for their good
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. They should take care of their emotional feelings
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 whenever they feel seeking or
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 their family needs help from an employer, the employer should get in touch with them , and sympathise with them by giving moral and financial support. To Sum up,
stress
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 is not good for an individual, it is a great concern how can be reduced at the workplace
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 because it hazards working capacity of an employee and
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affects the company.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • comfortable lifestyle
  • make ends meet
  • culture of 'presenteeism'
  • job insecurity
  • technological advancements
  • constant connectivity
  • globalization
  • irregular work hours
  • flexible working schedules
  • work-life balance
  • employee training and development
  • productivity
  • efficiency
  • healthier work environment
  • mental health resources
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