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Car ownership has increased so rapidly over the past thirty years that many cities in the world are now 'one big traffic jam' How true this statement is? What measures can government take to discourage people from using their cars?

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Over the past thirty years, the
number
 of
cars
 is increasing which has caused
lots
 of jams in big cities around the world. Why
this
type
 of vehicle became so popular among citizens?
First
 of all, more and more inhabitants are purchasing
cars
.
In other words
,
this
type
 of
transport
 has
lots
 of advantages. At
first
, with
this
type
 of
transport
 people can go from point A to point B in a short period of time.
Secondly
, citizens can travel when they want, without waiting for their
transport
such
 as bus, train, and tram. Because of these advantages, a huge
number
 of inhabitants bought these vehicles.
However
, using
cars
 in big cities has some disadvantages.
Firstly
, with the huge
number
 of
cars
, big cities seem like big traffic jams. By
this
,
lots
 of citizens are stuck in it for hours every day. Indeed, with long traffic jams, people cannot get where they want to go quickly.
Secondly
,
cars
 are not an environmentally friendly
type
 of
transport
. By
this
 I mean, they produce a lot of greenhouse gases, which destroy our ozone layer. Looking for these disadvantages, the government should take discourage people from using their
cars
. In the
first
 place, they should develop public
transports
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such
 as buses, trains, subways, and trams.
Secondly
, the government should upgrade convenience for bicycle and electro-scooter users. By
this
 I mean, by building special ways for them and increasing the
number
 of bicycle and electro-scooter renting services. For the final analysis, despite that
cars
 are a usable
type
 of
transport
, they have
lots
 of cons. And the government should solve those problems.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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