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Nowadays many people have access to computers on a wide basis and a large number of children play computer games. What are the positive and negative impacts of playing computer games and what can be done to minimize the bad effects? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own experience or knowledge.

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In today's world, many people think that excessive use of electronic gadgets
are
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 causing a lot of damage to mankind.
Kids
 are becoming addicted to video
games
. In
this
 essay, I shall elaborate on my point of view by analysing both sides of the argument before deducing a proper conclusion. Foremost, it is quite reasonable for me to believe that the idea of promoting computer
games
 in our daily life provides a lot of benefits. These days, parents are very happy because their
offsprings
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 are sitting in their bedrooms and playing various kinds of online
games
. It is because
kidnapping
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 of
kids
 is very common nowadays and parents think that their children are completely secure in
homes
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their homes
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. Another pivotal aspect is that video
games
 help
kids
 to enhance their creativity.
For example
, a kid who lives near my house
builds
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 a gaming application by playing and observing
games
. Needless to say, all these merits stand in good stead. Moving
further
, there are many pitfalls of electronic
games
. One of the most alarming
one
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 is that it causes many harmful diseases in
kids
 like obesity and sleeping sickness.
Besides
, children used to spend most of their time
in
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playing
games
 which
lead
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leads
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 to mental health issues. To recapitulate, because of the aforementioned reasons, we may safely conclude that the positive impact of the topic far outweighed the drawbacks that cannot be overlooked either.
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