Some people think new homes need to be built with private outdoor space such as a garden, yard, or balcony. Do you think this is more advantageous or more disadvantageous?

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• In our modern life, the majority of individuals believe that

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there are a lot of advantages than disadvantages

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because it is one of the

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greatest ways of living

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backyard

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and yards. • There

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of significant benefits of living

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of all, it is one of the best

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the fresh air.

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that, if they live

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, inhabitants are able to play football and volleyball with their friends and their families, it is the best way to spend their time with their close people like family and friends.

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in many European countries,

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this type

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country's government try to create opportunities for their citizens. • Turing to the other side of the argument despite its benefits it

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has, it is advantages.

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there easily and it is one of the best ways to relax. • In conclusion, having weighed everything mentioned

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conclusion that, nowadays many people prefer to living a house with

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because there are a lot of opportunities for humans to live with their family and friends. From my point of view, it is

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way for the village citiz

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

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310 words

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