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Some people believe that professionals such as doctors, engineers should be required to work in the country where they did their training. Others believe that they should be free to work in another country if they wish. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion

#people #professionals #doctors #engineers #work #country
The human
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 nature wants
to
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freedom
. The
people
 who are skilled
they
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should
work
 in
country
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the country
a country
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 where they were trained for
development
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the development
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the
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of the
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country
. But, I strongly believe that doctors,
engineers
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and engineers
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 who are
professionals
 should give
them
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the
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freedom
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the freedom
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 to
work
 in any
country
 in the world where they feel comfortable
to develop
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developing
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 their
mind
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minds
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. On the
on
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one
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 hand, the
people
 who are experts should not stay
their
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in their
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 own
country
 where they trained. The
professionals
 can
work
any
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in any
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kinds
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kind
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 of
places
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place
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 because they
work
 for the mango
people
 and they invent and innovate new
knowledge
 and ideas where they feel
independence
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independent
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.
However
, The proficient who are
open minded
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open-minded
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 feel to
work
 which is more safety, security,
handsome
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and handsome
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 salary.
For example
, the Indian
people
 who are dexterous and well educated,
they
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are operating the earth and they contribute to their
country
 where they trained to live in other
countries
such
 as
USA
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the USA
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,
UK
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and UK
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 to engage in
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the world
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world
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world's
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 largest technology like Amazon, Space X. By
this
, the
professionals
 should leave where they trained and they should be free to be well
skillful
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skilful
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.
On the other hand
, the
professionals
 are the assets where they
trained
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are trained
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. Whenever
,
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 they reject the
country
, it causes
the
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a
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 brain drain and the most brilliant
people
 do not come back to the
country
 where they trained.
For example
, the Bangladeshi ingenious leave
this
 county to
work
 in
another
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another country
other countries
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countries
 for
better
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a better
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 life. For
this
 result, creating
this
 brain drain will impact
on
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the economy of the clime. In my opinion, the specialist can gather extra
knowledge
 in every corner of the world. They should be
freedom
 where they choose to
work
. If
professionals
 go to
the
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apply
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other
countries
 they can involve
to
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in
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the
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apply
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new technology and modern civilization.
For example
, the
Somalia
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Somali
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people
 go
other
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to other
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countries
 to face new
knowledge
 and gain extra
knowledge
.
However
, the economy of Somalia is increasing
than
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in
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 the past years. To conclude, while requiring skilled
professionals
 to
work
 in the
country
 where they got trained, I believe it is the best
the
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apply
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freedom
to
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for
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 the
professionals
 who are doctors, engineers can
fulfill
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fulfil
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 their
demand
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demands
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.
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • professionals
  • doctors
  • engineers
  • required
  • training
  • home country
  • cultural
  • linguistic
  • advantages
  • economic impact
  • free
  • another country
  • globalization
  • international collaboration
  • improving
  • skills
  • knowledge
  • experience
  • opinion
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