IN THE FUTURE ROBOTS WILL DO MORE AND MORE JOBS INSTEAD OF HUMANS. DOES THIS DEVELOPMENT HAVE MOREADVANTAGES OF DISADVANTAGES?

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Nowadays due to
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technological advancement and varied developed devices
lifes
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of people are getting more convenient compared to the past. Technological boom is apparently influencing humankind's live styles and performances.
This
leads to the phenomenon that furtherly
robots
will replace people's
work
.
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disadvantages
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of
this
concept and explore reasons and examples
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it.
To begin
with, if a person's activity is replaced by
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technology in the future,
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society will lose
their
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jobs. The reason is that all occupations could be programmed in automation so no need for manual workers.
For instance
, drivers, receptionists in hotels or cashiers in groceries could lose their
work places
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workplaces
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since
these kind
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of jobs can be automated.
Thus
,
consequently
, the community will strive for making
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ends meet in order to support their families
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themselves.
Secondly
, it is a danger if
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jobs will be taken by robotic devices due to
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IT intelligence is just a machine with written IT codes.
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if
this
programme is broken it could cause a potential danger to
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the population
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since there are no humans who can control and prevent unexpected flaws
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the machinery.
For example
,
although
smart IT intelligent
robots
are set up for working without negative consequences, the device sometimes has drawbacks
such
as
inability
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to analyse and fix problems by themselves .
Therefore
, any incidents during
process
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of
work
can be an issue for
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and folks' lives. To conclude, in present days nobody can complete their
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tasks without
assistance
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the assistance
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of
technologies
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technology
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.Due to
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IT development,
currently
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everything is getting automated. So there are some future predictions that
robots
will take over individuals' workplaces. While
robots
are working
instead
of persons ,
ones
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will lose their wages due to the shortage of
work
vacancies and can not meet their lives demands.
Moreover
, incidents could
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during the operation since mistakes could be followed by
robots
' performances.So, in order to eradicate
such
drawbacks,all automated
robots
should
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thoroughly and several times.
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