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Some people believe that climate effects the person’s way of life while other believe that climate has greater impact on economy of a region. Discuss both views and give your opinion

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A fair amount of the public believes that climate change affects the lives of
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 whereas others say that the economic condition of the nation has more effect. now ,
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 essay will hash out both viewpoints in forthcoming paragraphs before reaching any conclusion. one of the main reasons is that global warming is increasing at an alarming rate as environmental pollution is escalating .when human beings do various activities namely deforestation,industrialisation and burning of fossil fuels,they release numerous greenhouse gases
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 as carbon dioxide, methane ,sulphur dioxide and nitrogen oxide .through
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, the temperature of the earth is rising.
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 ,the pattern of occurrence of rainfall will change and
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 different disasters like drought and floods will upsurge.along with
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 , the migration of
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 will increase due to more crop failures.
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,meteorologist witness delays in Southwest rainfall in the case of India . discussing the latter viewpoint,health, as well as education, plays a vital role in all countries of the world .owing to
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, these are the basic necessities of life .there are some parts of the world like South Africa and Iran where
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 struggle a lot because these economies lack hospital and school. if proper education and health facilities are provided to the public, the literacy rate will grow up and the death rate will decline.
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 ,the image of the nation will improve in the eyes of other countries and simultaneously the living standard of
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 will improve and they will lead a happy life. to conclude ,
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 climate change has an adverse effect on
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's way of life ,I firmly believe that economic conditions have a much greater role to play which cannot be ignored.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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