In some countries, owning a home rather than renting one is very important for people. Why might this be the case? Do you think this is a positive or negative situation?

In some nations, it is crucial for people to have their own
home
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instead
of renting a
place
. It is often connected to cultural reasons, but
also
to more financial ones. From my perspective having a
home
as your property is much more positive rather than paying someone to have a
place
to live in.
Firstly
, in many
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it is a cultural thing to live with parents or even grandparents. Having a
home
for the family is
also
having it for multiple generations that come after. Multi-generation homes help old traditions to survive modern times and grandparents help their grandchildren to understand
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and to enjoy them.
For instance
, in India
this
model of living, the whole family together, helps
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a new life partner for the youngest generation.
Also
, when parents go to work grandparents can take care of children, cook for them, clean the house and generally do the housework.
Secondly
, renting something can be much more expensive than owning a
place
. Renting a
place
depends on the price that your landlord gives you.
Therefore
you have to watch out if they do not cheat on you, by inflating the
rents
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without any real reason.
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if some tragic world event happens
such
as war they are usually scared for their money and
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they skyrocket their prices. When owning a
home
you do not have to be scared of anything like that. There may be plenty of reasons, but as stated previously, it is definitely better to live in owned property than in a rented one.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • ownership
  • renting
  • importance
  • sense of security
  • stability
  • financial investment
  • asset
  • customize
  • decorate
  • belonging
  • community
  • potential
  • future generations
  • long-term
  • cost advantage
  • control
  • living space
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