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Certain personal qualities cannot be achieved through university studies. Do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give your opinion and relevant examples

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It is irrefutable that tertiary
education
 is a great source of knowledge in the modern age,
nevertheless
, we cannot deny the fact that various positive changes in an individual life cannot be availed through higher
education
. A majority of society favours
this
 notion, while the rest opposes it.
Thus
, in
this
 essay, I shall elaborate on my point of view by analysing both sides of the argument before deducing a proper conclusion.
To begin
 with, I firmly disagree with
this
 statement, the
first
 and foremost reason stems from the fact that higher
education
 institution enables us to specialise in a specific field of our choice and gives
a vast information
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 about every aspect of life.
For example
, a pupil of the history department has more words about historic buildings, ancient culture and traditions rather than an ordinary person.
Besides
, another pivotal aspect is that higher
education
 sectors provide us with many kinds of
skills
 like communication
skills
, time management
skills
, computer
skills
, graphics and many more. These
skills
 cannot be achieved without an
education
 system.
Moreover
, different degrees can only be gained when you are studying in any
education
 centre. To recapitulate, because of the aforementioned reasons, we may safely conclude that due to the huge source of knowledge, universities are able to provide both theoretical and practical
skills
 which cannot be overlooked either.
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