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More and more plastic waste has polluted cities ,countrysides and oceans. What problems does it cause ? And what measures can be taken.

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It is irrefutable that moulded materials are causing serious damage to living,
nevertheless
, measures should be taken to eradicate
this
 problem.
Thus
, the following paragraph would highlight my perspective which leads to a logical conclusion.
To begin
 with, the
first
 and foremost reason stems from the fact that in the modern age, people are using things which mostly contain
plastic
 material, as a consequence, these products are spreading all over the
world
, causing deleterious effects on the planet.
For example
, a recent study by the
World
 Health Organization
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 that 80% of Indian cows were dead from consuming poisonous moulded items which were found everywhere in India.
Besides
, another pivotal aspect is that junk food becomes a trending
world
 of
the
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present
world
that
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is usually served in
plastic
 bags. By eating
this
 food, youngsters are suffering from obesity, a serious disease which is the root of all diseases. Moving
further
, there are myriad
of
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solutions8 which should be taken to improve
this
 fatal situation, the most preponderant one is that awareness programs should be held to give information about the harmful effects of
plastic
 on the globe. On other hand, universities should introduce new courses to aware the pupils about the
damages
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 of toxins which are causing fatal diseases in humans. To recapitulate, no doubt,
plastic
 has polluted our cities, countryside and beaches, while it could be eradicated from our environment if we held various awareness programs.
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