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One of your friends has just had a twin and for some reason you cannot go visit them in their town. You should write a letter to your friend and in your letter you should • congratulate them on the new-born babies • explain why you cannot go visit them • offer to help in case they need help.

#friends #reason #visit #town #friend #new-born #babies #offer #case
Dear my
friend
Hello
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Hello,
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 my best
friend
. How are you? Congratulations on having a baby my
friend
. May he give his life with happiness. May he be a great person in the future. I am sorry I could not go. because I have a lot of work. I could not get permission from our leader. These days our leader has changed. He is a very strict person. That's why I could not go. I will definitely visit you next week. Tell me if you need help my
friend
. I will help as much as I can. Feel free to ask for help without hesitation. I hope that you respond
my
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 letter soon. Your
friend
. Odil.
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coherence cohesion
Your greeting and closing could be more formal and appropriate for a letter to a friend. Make sure to use an appropriate salutation and closing for informal letters.
task achievement
Ensure that you fully address all parts of the task prompt, including offering help and providing a suitable reason for not visiting. Use a more formal and appropriate tone for a letter, even to a friend.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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