The charts below show what UK graduate and postgraduate students who did not go into full-time work did after leaving college in 2008. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show what UK graduate and postgraduate students who did not go into full-time work did after leaving college in 2008.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The two bar charts compare the activity of graduates and postgraduates after leaving the college with
exclusion
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the exclusion
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of full-time workers in
UK
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the UK
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in 2008.
It is clear that
the majority of graduate and postgraduate
students
had part-time jobs or continued
for
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to
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further
study.
Additionally
, a small proportion of them did some voluntary work. Nearly thirty thousand graduate
students
enrolled in postgraduate courses after leaving
colleges
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college
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.
However
, about eighteen thousand graduates were working in part-time jobs which is nearly the same number
of
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as
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those who were unemployed at about sixteen thousand.
Moreover
, 3500 of the graduates did voluntary work. For postgraduates,
nearly
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a nearly
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similar
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a similar
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number of them had part-time work or doing
further
studies
by
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2535 and 2725
students
respectively.
However
, those who were not working or studying accounted for 1625
students
. Voluntary working was the least activity done by postgraduates
by
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with
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only 345
students
.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "further, however".
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words students with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • graduate/postgraduate students
  • full-time work
  • further study
  • part-time education
  • voluntary work
  • unemployment
  • travel/gap year
  • percentage/proportion
  • field of study
  • economic factors
  • trends
  • comparison
  • analysis
  • correlate
  • preferences
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