Some people believe that unpaid community service should be a compulsory part of high school programmes ( for example working for charity, improving the neighbourhood or teaching sports to young children). To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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In today's modern world,
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service
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is
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part of
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each nation and some
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groups
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of people suppose that education
program
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programs
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should include
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direction of unpaid support. I completely agree with
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statement due to the fact that
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of help can improve some personal skills of
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and
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develop
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the environment
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and neighbourhoods in countries.
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essay will elaborate
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reasons for including
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service
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in school programmes.
The extracurricular
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activities
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as working in charity or teaching sports to young children can open up some of the student's personal skills. One of the most important
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which
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develops
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this
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event is communication. Today each person want to improve
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sphere since thanks to
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skill people can create
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relationship with fellow
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or classmates.
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, many people use communication
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with friends, family and strangers on daily basis.
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,
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benefit is
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activity can develop
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the skill
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of working together which will beneficial for
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the future
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.
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, one of the important
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of unpaid
community
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service
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is that
students
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start to care about
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the envirenment
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envirenment
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environment
and landmarks in
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city
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the city
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. On top of that, the life expectancy of
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attractions will be longer, which will reduce the cost of maintaining attractions and allow the state to allocate more funds to other areas.
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, if schools help to clear
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the town
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from
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trash,
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city
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the city
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will be more clean and
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.
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,
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advantage is
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will gain more interesting knowledge about their town's environment which will
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develop
their view of
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the world
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. In conclusion, extracurricular activities
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as
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service
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should be included in
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a school
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program
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programs
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to develop
children
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world
view
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views
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and allow them
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some support to
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of their
city
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.
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,
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this
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events can reveal some essential skills of
students
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which will be helpful
for
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their
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life. On top of that their help will
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provide
beneficial
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a beneficial
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effect on
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the town
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which will help advance
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of
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city's
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the city's
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life.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • compulsory
  • high school programmes
  • unpaid community service
  • charity
  • improving the neighbourhood
  • teaching sports
  • sense of responsibility
  • empathy
  • broader perspective
  • societal issues
  • college applications
  • job applications
  • positive impact
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