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In some educational systems, children are required to study one or more foreign languages. In others, foreign language study is not a requirement. What are the potential benefits of foreign language study? Do you think the foreign language study is an important part of education?

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Some educational specialists believe that learning new
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 is essential for pupils, while others suppose there is no importance for that. In my opinion, children should study foreign
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 due to the plenty of advantages they have which will be considered below.
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 with, one of the most important upsides of learning new
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 is that studying a new thing is always useful to develop
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creativity and memory.
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, children who are forced to learn some
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 have wider erudition abilities, rather than pupils who do not have
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 requirements in a school.
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, those who are able to speak two or more
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 are likely to have better job offers.
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, if there is a choice between two specialists, an employer will choose those
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who have extra abilities
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 as knowledge of another
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, knowing different
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 is an important skill which shows that a potential employer
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 enough patience to study new things. From my perspective, learning new
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 is essential due to the fact that there are new online technologies in
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a user to be able
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 another
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.
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, students who are studying overseas have to deal with different educational programmes which are written
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 the other
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, if a person
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 to have the latest knowledge in their field of study, he/she has to speak a foreign
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 or even be
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fluent. To conclude, there are two different approaches
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children
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 education systems. The
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 learning foreign
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 while the other excludes
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 essence. In my opinion, learning a foreign
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 is a vital skill for people due to the enormous number of pros it has.
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