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In some nations ,they have the option to import food from all around the globe. To what extent do you think its benefits outweigh the drawbacks?

Nowadays people can enjoy delicacies from various parts of the world, due to increasing
food
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 imports. Developed nations are importing
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 of their
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 supply from
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. In my opinion, it has more drawbacks than advantages. Due to industrialization, western
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 are now short of farmers, which made a huge dent in their agricultural production. People are being attracted to high-paying technological jobs, and
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farmers became a rare commodity.
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, The United States of America hardly produces anything, as they are unable to find workers to work
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 the farm. Due to that, they import
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 of their
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 supply, which is a very dangerous situation, as It is dependent on other
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 for their needs.
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 importing
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 of the
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 is a disadvantage for a nation, it is beneficial to the people as they can enjoy
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 from other parts of the world, which might be healthier and improves their health.
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, scientists consider Kiwi as a super fruit, which has
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 amount of micronutrients required for
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immunity, which is found only in New Zealand. In conclusion, Importing
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 from all around the globe can be beneficial to the nation, as citizens can enjoy different cuisines.
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, the risk of being dependent on other
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 for their own needs is a major drawback.

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